Rewrites About Pond Water Prince Part 2

My Dear Future Readers,

Did I mention how HARD rewrites are? No? Well, I’m telling you now. Rewrites are HARD. Why? Because you have to cut out pieces and rework them back in a different way in a way that is extremely different from the original version. In my previous post, which you can check out here: The Rewrite Of Pond Water Prince, I touch lightly on the rewrites that I am doing for this wonderful Bad Boy Evil doer.


I FINISHED THE REWRITE!  It took me a while to do but I finally did it. I know that you are interested in how I managed to finish the rewrite.  That’s what I’m here to tell you about.  Pond Water Prince was never an easy character to write from the beginning. Why?  Well , I’ll use the words of my editor,  Alyssa Nand to  explain this:

“You are too nice.”  – Alyssa Nand.

Yes,  in a way, I do agree with her because I am nice and it is hard for me to write someone who is evil because of that fact.

Also,  I became aware in the process of rewriting my evil doer that he had very few scenes with his captive,  my main female character,  Princess Amy.  This fact had to be corrected immediately.  So, I took a few days adding in scenes that were not even written in the original version of the book,  Book 1: Forbidden Love.  To be honest, I was afraid that my editor would not approve of my additional scenes but as luck would have it,  she did approve.

After doing this rewrite and adding in scenes that were not in the original version of the book,  I realized that my new ideas make my book,  Book 1: Forbidden Love even better.  I only hope that you,  my dear future readers like what I did.  I hope that I made Pond Water Prince sound more realistic in his interactions with my other characters.  But I also hope that I did not make him too scary when he first appears in the book.

You see, I wanted to create a balance between scary and relatable.  I really hope that I did not overdo it.

When I think of my first evil doer, I think of two things: revenge and kidnapping.  When I was writing this character,  it was hard to create someone who is evil without knowing what his motives are.

In this case, I think that kidnapping is something that is fairly easy to relate to the real world and also what fairy tale doesn’t have kidnapping.  Rapunzel was kidnapped and trapped in a tower. In Beauty and the Beast, Belle’s father was locked in the Beast’s dungeon.  Therefore we can conclude that kidnapping is a common theme and act  that villains engage in to make the story interesting and bring action into the story.

Also, this is good for giving the protagonist or “good guy” in the story and chance to do something heroic.  That is also a big plus in the story because like in the scenes with Pond Water Prince,  my male main character got a chance to save the princess and be a hero in the eyes of the king and queen.  That is also a reason why I love fairytales.  Royalty always intrigued me and I love writing about royal families.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.  I thank you all for your infinite support.

Yours Truly,

Diana Rose

YA Fantasy Romance Published Authore



The Rewrite Of Pond Water Prince

My Dear Future Readers:

Today, I want to talk about rewrites.

What are rewrites?

Rewrites are edits that you do and you rework the plot in a different way. Recently, I have been working on rewrites for a chapter  in Book 1: Forbidden Love. Trust me, it’s better the way I rewrote it. But that is not the point of this post. Not at all.

I want to tell you about my favorite evil doer.  Why? Because, every book has an evil doer and some may not be evil at first.  “Bad guys” are written to bring out the heroic attitude in the main character. I never thought that writing “bad guys ” could be fun.  But as I was rewriting a scene in one of my chapters,  I realized that  my character is really fun for me to rewrite because even though he is evil,  he makes me laugh.

As a result, I realized that for a villain to be great, his language has to be great as well. Which means that I as an author have to write dialogue that would fit my  “Mister Bad Guy” perfectly. Let me tell you that creating beautifully written dialogue for a villain is hard. But not impossible.

Pond Water Prince was my first book bad guy and he is special to me for that reason.  Going over the chapters that involve him is a special edit to me. I can tell you as an author who has completed Book 1 and 2 and yes out of those two books Pond Water Prince will always be special to me. Not only because he was my first person to create evil plots but also because of the challenge he gave me while I was writing about him. I had to overcome the standard bad guy model and create who was all my own and believable to my readers.

I had to think outside the box. After all, there are a lot of villains out there in the world of fairy-tales who have earned their place in our hearts. I knew that  my character had to be unique, therefore his motives had to be extraordinary.

“What does Pond Water Prince Want??”

 I thought  about this for a long time in the beginning of the chapter. My evil character had to be going after something so important to him that he would do anything to get it. Trust me, that was not easy to come up with at first but then I thought about my elderly grandparents – who were still alive at the time that I began my book – it became clear to me then. So, I wrote the first thought that came to mind.

Next thing I needed was the way he would achieve his goal. That was a little easier since a lot of people kidnapped people and it would be something real that anyone could relate to in my book. Of course, I have to say that having Pond Water Prince as a name was kind of funny to me at first but it fit him. So, I thought that what he did in the book would be able to grab my future readers. I mean, really….What do you think of when you hear the name Pond Water Prince? Is it a name that is associated with someone nice? Or is it a person you would run away from?

That’s how I usually choose names for my bad guys. So, you se that as an author I have to be careful about naming the characters properly or otherwise they lose the effect of a villain.  That’s why I love my first ever bad guy and I hope you will love to hate him too.

I look forward to hearing from you soon. I thank you all for your infinite support.

Yours Truly,

Diana Rose

YA Fantasy Romance Published Author